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Reviewer: Leilachan   Signed  starstarstarstarstar  [Report This]
Date: October 07, 2012 4:29 PM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

Gorgeous set up for what promises to be an intense story. I'm such a sucker for siblings protecting one another. Especially when done so fiercely.
I had to backtrack to make certain I hadn't misinterpreted things because; wow! Twins? Inuyasha and Yasha? Genius.

How exciting. This is an angle I've never seen done and holds loads of potential considering he is hanyou and possesses the whole spectrum of traits/personalities that accompany that. By splitting him into "2", it leaves a world of untapped possibilities! (hope that made sense)

Well done for a starter chapter. Wherever you take this, I'm following!! I'm hooked and ready for more soon. It's always a pleasure.

Da Grrrl Says: COURT! <33333

Thanks so much for the glowing review; I appreciate it! This story has so many directions I could go in; it's hard to choose just one. I do have that main element we talked about, but there are other things I can add... hehe. However, I want to keep this one short, so I'll probably keep the insanity to a minimum... OR WILL I?! XD



Reviewer: Jaszy13   Signed   [Report This]
Date: October 07, 2012 2:26 PM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

Thanks for confusing the hell out of me lol

Da Grrrl Says: You're welcome!



Reviewer: Neo   Signed  starstarstarstarstar  [Report This]
Date: October 07, 2012 2:02 PM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

oohhh.. I love soo far, such a neat view point on Yasha...
I can't wait to read more, just take care and don't write to much it hurts..

Ohh I gonna love this one..

Da Grrrl Says: Neooooo! You're definitely gonna like this one, I'm not even doubting that and we both know why -hehe. Writing is still not easy for me, so this was still a tiny bit of a struggle, but it did come out the way I wanted (mostly), so I won't complain. Getting chapters out at all is a blessing these days. >.< I'm going to do some writing today and see what happens. Thanks for the story luv! <333



Reviewer: Monica   Signed   [Report This]
Date: October 07, 2012 2:07 AM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

wow! i got a little confused towards the end there! i was like, wait what's going on?! haha. but i dont think ive seen a story with inuyasha's counterparts being totally separate, or in this case, separated into twins (if that makes sense, cause it sounds okay in my head but not while im reading it back to myself haha). but i do think it's cute that yash calls their dad poppy. so adorable!! i always love how you portray/present the characters as little kids, so cute!! anyways, thanks for sharing this story and can't wait for the next update!

Da Grrrl Says: The beginning was actually supposed to be confusing because I never mentioned anything about the twins -InuYasha is only mentioned as a nameless third person. The reason for their names (Yash/InuYasha) and stuff like that will be revealed later on as the story gets going. And I'm glad you like their chibi-ness. I don't do it that often, but sometimes I like to show the characters' "beginnings". But that will be the only chapter where they're fully 'babies'. This story is a little dark and angsty, but nothing too extreme. I'm working on the next chapter and the accompanying layout, so that should be fun. ^^



Reviewer: Dark_Lady_69   Signed  starstarstarstarstar  [Report This]
Date: October 07, 2012 1:56 AM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

Wow... There's an idea I've never seen before... Twins... This looks to be a very interesting story...

Da Grrrl Says: Thanks. :) I'm hoping that when all is said and 'revealed', you guys will still want to read it -haha.



Reviewer: Rhyelee   Signed  starstarstarstarstar  [Report This]
Date: October 06, 2012 9:25 PM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

I was so confused for a while, but the ending cleared it up! I've never seen a fic in which yash was separated into his two different counterparts, but you've always been an innovator~ hehe~ Lovely prose as usual! I'm glad you have more time for yourself to write and such nowadays~~ I'll be looking forward to more whenever you can manage to squeeze in more updates for us!!

Da Grrrl Says: RHYEEEEEEEEEE! XD

Yesh, deliberately confusing because I didn't want anything to be revealed until the end. But from the next chapter on, things will be written more clearly. I didn't think the idea of InuYasha being his own twin was that unique, but several people said it already, so I guess it is. They're not that way by some big supernatural thing; they're just twins, though, it probably would have been more interesting if there was more to it. :P

Thanks for the review luv!



Reviewer: Abby   Signed  starstarstarstarstar  [Report This]
Date: October 06, 2012 8:23 PM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

Woah.. completely threw me off but I'm so lookIng forward to readIng thIs new story! I totally wasn't expecting Inuyasha twins. This is pretty freakin exciting! I can tell you're actually having some fun writing this..or am I completely off? Hopefully Im not completely off . XD
I always like Sesshomaru a lot more than I normally do when you're the one writing him. It was sweet how much he obviously cares about .. er.. the twins?
Thank you for sharing a new story with us! Can't wait to see how it develops!

Da Grrrl Says: ABBBBBBBS!

Thanks for the review luv! You're right; I did enjoy writing this one. I commissioned some cool art and it inspired this story (something that doesn't happen often). I'm making the layout now, so it will be ready with the next update. This story is reminiscent of another story I'm writing, but many of the dynamics are completely different, as is most of the plot. It's angsty and a bit dark (read the summary), but I felt compelled to write it for myself. The hope is that you guys will like it, too, but I won't be too disappointed if y'all don't. As always, thanks for taking a minute to acknowledge my efforts -it's appreciated. <333



Reviewer: Ikalia   Signed   [Report This]
Date: October 06, 2012 8:01 PM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

Whoa, so confused. Crazy unique story line, no idea where this is going...thats kind of exciting :)

Da Grrrl Says: I swear, it's totally NOT confusing. I'm writing a story about twins (which I revealed at the end), only the twins are InuYasha's Human and Hanyou sides. The names might confuse since I tend to call InuYasha "Yash" in my stories, but I will remedy that in this fic so you guys can keep track of who's who. :)



Reviewer: Frosta   Signed   [Report This]
Date: October 06, 2012 7:07 PM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

At first I was trying to figure out where the story was going. I have never come across a story like this one as well. Can't wait to see where this story is going to go!

Da Grrrl Says: There are certain stories I pen for myself, and this is one of them, so I can only hope you'll want to finish it when you see all of the twists and turns. lol. Thanks for the review!



Reviewer: Boudou   Signed   [Report This]
Date: October 06, 2012 6:34 PM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

wow not bad,

Da Grrrl Says: Thanks. ^^



Reviewer: smpnst   Signed   [Report This]
Date: October 06, 2012 2:41 PM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

wow! this story is really different! I liked the first chapter, can't wait to read more :D

Da Grrrl Says: Thanks a bunch! This story IS kinda different, but it's a topic I've visited before -just presented in a different way. It was inspired by some commissioned art, and it kept bugging me to be written, so I just rolled with it. It may not be everyone's cup of tea, but I never let that stop me before. ^^



Reviewer: Inceeba   Signed   [Report This]
Date: October 06, 2012 2:36 PM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

Hey babe :)

this is definitely something else. I´ve got some theories, but be it anyways I will love it for sure. Each sentence from you is a blessing, so keep going, you are my air supply :D

Your Alex

Da Grrrl Says: ALEX!!! <3333 How are you?? I hope you and the baby are well. Thanks for always showing my work some love. It's most appreciated and always means a lot to me. *hugs* I want to learn to love writing again, so I'm not going to limit myself anymore to updating only current fictions. If I want to try a new plot, I'm just going to do it and let the chips fall where they may! Hope your weekend is awesome!



Reviewer: Kat   Signed  starstarstarstarstar  [Report This]
Date: October 06, 2012 2:08 PM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

Well way to throw me off! I was all, who is this other half? Well, I was off on whose pov it was. This so different than what I thought it would be from the title. I'm really intrigued to see where you take it. Yay for Sess being an awesome big brother, too.

Da Grrrl Says: Kat! ^^ You were really thrown off? Wow. I guess because I'm writing it, it all feels kinda obvious to me (though, I did try to keep the relationships secret until the end). Maybe I did a better job than I thought? XD This story won't be long (No more epics for me!), but I wanted to write it because of the art I commissioned. The moment I saw the gorgeous lineart I felt inspired. (I also read a loooooot of manga... lol). I just received the colored version an hour ago, so there will be a skin soon. (Visuals are always a treat!)



Reviewer: Kmoaton   Signed  starstarstarstarstar  [Report This]
Date: October 06, 2012 12:15 PM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

Awesome to see something new from you, chica!! I can't wait to see what's in store!

Da Grrrl Says: K-Gur! :D

I haz trying to get back into writing on a more regular basis. It's not at all easy, but I think that if I keep "growing" and writing what I want to write, WHEN I feel like writing it (regardless of whatever else I have to pen), I'll get more of my prose groove back. We'll see. But for now, I'm just gonna ride it out!



Reviewer: Hanyoukagome962   Signed   [Report This]
Date: October 06, 2012 11:16 AM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

So there's Yash and Inuyasha. Twins but one is human and the other half-demon? Interesting...

Da Grrrl Says: Yeah, they're twins. Genetics are a funny thing, especially when it comes to twins. Lots of stuff can happen to make them different, yet the same. Youkai are purely fantasy, though, so it gives me license to play with them the way I wish -haha.



Reviewer: flygirlrosie   Signed  starstarstarstarstar  [Report This]
Date: October 06, 2012 10:33 AM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

I'm am so excited for this new fic! :) Your stories are always so wonderful.

Da Grrrl Says: Thanks so much! <3 This story is different, yet still a concept I've visited before, but from a different angle. It won't be for everyone. Heck, some people may not even want to read it, but I felt like writing it, so I did. Hopefully, you won't be too disappointed. :P



Reviewer: Mandy   Signed  starstarstarstarstar  [Report This]
Date: October 06, 2012 10:23 AM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

Human and half breed InuYasha as TWINS?!
This is by far one of the most unique concepts I've come by. Can't wait where this is going. I wonder how one was born hunan and the other half breed, though.

Da Grrrl Says: MAN-MAAAAAAAAAN! You think it's unique, really? lol. It was inspired by some art I had commissioned (should be done soon). I saw it and said, I really want to write something on this one, so I did. It's not a story for everyone, but you know me! When do I let stuff like that stop me from doing what I want to do? XD

As for why they're so 'different', I'm sure it's something Human Yash has pondered many times himself, lol. But really, it's just a play on genetics, that's all. :D



Reviewer: Aisha   Signed  starstarstarstarstar  [Report This]
Date: October 06, 2012 10:20 AM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

Can't wait for more. / o This was just a great start, it pulled me in from the start. I love the way you portray little InuYasha, it's so damn adorable. But, I can't wait to see a little more about InuYasha and Yash.
And, oh god, Yash give me a lollipop too! I think I'm going to go get some Godiva now. ;D

Wonderful chapter!

Da Grrrl Says: Beta babe!! Thanks a bunch of scoping out this chapter for me. I ended up doing a few minor rewrites (I'm never satisfied), but nothing that would spoil your work. ^^

As for Hanyou InuYasha, I wanted to play with their personalities. He's usually the mouthy, brash one, but this time, he's the one who needs protecting. I thought it would be cute to make Human Yasha the "brave" one this time around. Should be fun.

And those lollipops are fucking awesome. AWESOME. They make the best chocolate on the planet.



Reviewer: Draconas12   Signed  starstarstarstar  [Report This]
Date: October 06, 2012 10:09 AM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

Good chapter. I'm a bit confused, but I'm sure it will all get straightened out.

Da Grrrl Says: J, we'll discuss this by e-mail. lol.



Reviewer: Kagome313   Signed   [Report This]
Date: October 06, 2012 9:41 AM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

*cutting off my review is like blasphemy argh lol

"They are twins, you bakas, or do you routinely prove that you are your parents' failed projects"

Da Grrrl Says: It cut you off again, girl! You know what it is? Abi doesn't like when you use certain smilies and symbols. The site reads it as broken html code and cuts the content off. So if you don't use smilies, it will stop chopping off your reviews.



Reviewer: Kagome313   Signed  starstarstarstarstar  [Report This]
Date: October 06, 2012 9:33 AM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

Well how art thou??? =D hope all is good with u ^_^

*Squee*!! new read alert!! Lol. Gosh I enjoyed this so much, but then again what dont I enjoy from you?? Haha. This was a fun read AND very interesting might I had. I have a theory but won't put it out there to feed your pet peeve. And I've been reading so much fantasy stuff I may b reading too much into it. But blv me - amma stick to it to feed my curiosity.

I ALWAYS love how you portray Sesshy. Really I always fell in love with him all over again with his tenderness yet hatefulness all in one lol.

"They are twins, you bakas, or do you routinely prove that you are your parents' failed projects"

Da Grrrl Says: Bubs! <33 I'm working on the next chapter of your story and there's cool new art and other goodies. XD Sorry that's taking so long...

Isn't Sesshomaru fun? I like playing with him, especially in AU when I can make him a good guy. As for your theory, you've been with me for a long time, so you know how I tend to think. You're probably right, but yeah, don't voice that here. This ONE time, you can just e-mail me and I'll confirm IF you're correct. XD I deliberately didn't give any insight to the plot. I just wanted to put the prologue out there because I thought it was a chapter that anyone could enjoy. With the next, I'll lay down more hints. ^___^



Reviewer: Alpine   Signed  starstarstarstarstar  [Report This]
Date: October 06, 2012 7:07 AM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: Never Tear Us Apart

Lovely....Looks to be the start of a great story.
Huggles ^_^

Da Grrrl Says: Thanks! It came to me from some art that I commissioned (You'll see it when I post the next chapter) and I was inspired to write a short story :D



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