[Report This]Date: October 16, 2007 10:29 PM
Chapter number: 7
Title: Mommy and Me.
Well isnt this nifty?? Another cliffhanger!! It just facinates me how much joy you get out of writing angst. I wonder....do you laugh out loud when you do this...................?? Or do you accually cackle like a witch and say 'Next time my kiddies..." ??? Everytime you do that, I imagine millions of women accross the world sitting at their desktops...reading the last words to your chaps and suddenly they shriek in horror and then place their palm to thier foreheads before gracefully passing out!!! Yup, millions of women......you Lifetime you!!!
Author's Response: Biscuuuuuit!!! My biscuity-biscuit. :P Now, you know I'm not that bad. It was just a tiny cliffy at the end of a calm chapter. :Drn*walks away whistling* xoxoxoxxo
"Absolution: The channel for women." HAHAHAHA!
[Report This]Date: October 16, 2007 10:02 PM
Chapter number: 7
Title: Mommy and Me.
You really know how to torment a girl, you know that? I wasn't able to review when I first read this chapter this morning, but, I do now, and I'm going to hand it to you.
First off, as I say every time, I am absolutely in love with your writing ability - your flow and mere choice of words, sentence structure, stylistic devices, and brilliant thought processes. Not to mention the killer lemon that had me begging for more - and even moreso after the phone calls. As well, the relationships of InuyashaKagome, InuyashaJaden, and KagomeJaden were presented beautifully.
THEN you had to end it the way you did. Now, having been reading your work for so long now, I should be used to you always having some insane twist hiding somewhere in that labyrinth of a mind of yours - but this time, you sincerely caught me off guard. Although, I found the foreshadowing of Kagome saying she wouldn't hurt Jaden - but it didn't quite click. And the whole "nothing can break us now" - WHY?! I can only imagine how Inuyasha would feel if Kagome called him saying she was on her way to the hospital because he cracked his head open or broke his neck - hella pissed? Maybe. Or maybe somewhat guilty himself for distracting Kagome in the way he did ... but the optimistic, FAITHFUL *hint hint* side of me says someone like Kouga is going to come in and save the day - and end up flirting with Kagome ... either way, I see Inuyasha getting a little bit peeved. But you have a plan, right? You always do ...
I would say you were evil, but that's not true - all writers have their signature device - and tumultuous, tormentative cliffies are so obviously yours.
Despite not liking the ending (but cliff-hangers are not usually meant to be liked, no?) this was another brilliant chapter. I'm quite enjoying myself on this ride of a drama. Until the next, I am anticipatingly waiting literally on the edge of my seat ...
-Claire. ^^
So ... I didn't really hand it to you. haha.
Author's Response: Claire, I must say that you give some of the best reviews I've ever received. Serioosly. Not because you've offered me praise (which I greatly appreciate that), but because I can tell that you really read the chapters. You, and two other readers of mine, never fail to catch all of the little things that I'll throw in as clues, or in my case, warnings -haha. That's so rewarding, I can't begin to tell you. Then mix in the fact that you really enjoy the stories, and wow. You're amazing. Thanks for that. :)
Date: October 16, 2007 9:03 PM
Chapter number: 7
Title: Mommy and Me.
Oh WAY TO GO. >.< a cliffie. now im gonna have nightmares of falling inuyasha look-a-like kiddies falling to there death from the monkey bars. grats. other that than part it was Tony the Tiger approved GREATTT!!! wewt!!
Author's Response: LOLOL! Tony the Tiger! I love that. <3 Thanks for reading and making me laugh on a crappy day!
Date: October 16, 2007 5:58 PM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: The Day the Sun Set.
heyheyhey! its anonymous again ^^, FIIIIIINALLY A chAPTER up thehe, made my day :D, so, just giving my 2cents, i hope jayjay doesnt fall : ( and i kind of agree with what "Tina" said (viewer underneath) said, what if he does fall and inuyasha just ...blames kagome : (, THATS NOT GOOOD. but i bet you have something even better up your sleeves :) , update soon!
Date: October 16, 2007 5:01 PM
Chapter number: 7
Title: Mommy and Me.
OMG!!!!!! No, no, no!! Don't hurt the child, don't hurt him!!
Although I fear that you might...I mean, I thought that it was a little odd that Kagome said earlier in the chapter that she wasn't going to hurt him, because I thought that it would've been obvious that she wouldn't. (And Yasha agreed with me). But now...I think that you might've been foreshadowing! And maybe that "nothing can break us now" was foreshadowing too! What is Inuyasha gonna think if Jaden gets killed/paralyzed from a broken neck/other serious injury. Their marriage is far from concrete-strong at this point, that's for sure...
The Catapult Theory: The pessimistic outlook on life in which one believes all good things come crashing to an amazingly bad end. The good things that happen begin to pile up until it seems like everything is going the right way (the catapult is pulled back a little further with every good thing that happens). But then it all goes horrible wrong and the catapult snaps back and hits you in the eye (the further it’s pulled back ie. the more good things that happen, result in a more painful snap at the end).That's what this chapter made me think of.
Anyways, Happy Writing!
TLH
Author's Response: TCT is perfect, lol. I can see why you thought of that. You always come with the bestest stuffs. :P And you picked up the "little" things I left lying around -aaaah wonderful! Thanks for reading, Tina, and I hope you had an awesome birthday. Giftfic is coming your way. ^^
[Report This]Date: October 16, 2007 6:47 AM
Chapter number: 7
Title: Mommy and Me.
It's 7:40 am, must go to work, in 20 and I'm reading this magnificient chapter!!!! Sweet, sexy, tearyeyed, scared... and so full of love... Hopefully, and really hope that she will catch him with that kind of supeheroes abilities that mothers have.
Really, Grrrl to outsmart yourself with this chapter!!!!! Sweet, lovely... and JayJay is a pearl!!!!
Congrats!!!! And thank you, thank you, thank you, thank you, thank you for this wonderful work!! Must go to work!!!.
EXCELLENT JOB!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Mama Hen!! Thanks so much for the review -I'm happy that you like the story. *Big hugs*
Date: October 16, 2007 4:54 AM
Chapter number: 7
Title: Mommy and Me.
Awesome Update, KiKi!!! I can't wait until the next chapter!
Author's Response: Arigatou, Christal!! Thanks for reading. ^^
Date: October 16, 2007 1:44 AM
Chapter number: 7
Title: Mommy and Me.
STRANGLING people is still illegal, right? DAMN! Just checking. And you know you deserve it after an EVIL cliffie like that! LOL. Another great chapter, albeit a happier one (except for that evil cliffie of an ending). The lemon was.....REALLY hot, as was Inuyasha's phone seduction....but I expect no less from you, especially on that.
But, my favorite part was the long-awaited bonding between Jaden and Kagome. Kids are SO sweet and forgiving if someone is kind to them and truly SINCERE about it (because most kids have excellent bullshit barometers and can spot a phony a mile away). And Jaden, in spite of Kagome's coldness to him in the past, could somehow tell that she was genuinely reaching out to him....and like all sweet babies, gave her another chance. It was fitting that she had to work for it a little; she was really cold to him when he first got there (for understandable reasons, if not excusable ones)...but still he didn't make her wait very long. The whole pancake scene was adorable. I loved it.
But, now I just hope that the fairytale won't end tragically before it truly has a chance to begin. Inuyasha and Kagome JUST found their way back to each other. If something happens to Jaden so soon on her watch....oh, my goodness. There are no words for the damage this can do. It was truly an honest mistake. Kagome isn't used to children...so she's new to the whole parenting thing. Babies have to be watched....and this new mother just made a serious mistake. But, after her previous behavior towards Jaden, will Inuyasha believe that? They love each other desperately .....but the foundation is still so shaky. This whole thing can go south REALLY fast. Plus, I'd just hate for Jaden himself to be hurt, even beyond what it could do to Kagome and Inuyasha's relationship; he's such a little sweetie in his own right. I don't know where you're taking this but the angst potential just went sky high....again. Oh, well; I guess I'll just have to duck and cover.... again, lol. GREAT story.
Author's Response: There you are! I was wondering where you've been. How the heck are you, girl?? Thanks for reading. ^^ Okay, as ALWAYS, you hit it on the head. IF Jaden should get hurt, you can only imagine how InuYasha would react, especially since everything is so shaky. But, we don't know what will happen yet, ne? So, we'll just have to see.
I do like the fact that Jaden's "bullshit barometer" was working, lol. Or Kags would have had a worse time, but he did make her work for it (just a lil'). I like their interaction, too -she's really trying. But, like we've said, we'll have to see how it all plays out in the next chappie. Tee hee! Cliffies rawk! :P
Date: October 16, 2007 12:18 AM
Chapter number: 7
Title: Mommy and Me.
Huh? Jay-Jay no fall! She can't go out with the boy and he bust his head open the first day, can she? No, no, no, no no, that just will not do. She has to do something heroic and magically catch him in mid air or something because the little baby can't get hurt. And all the while she was talking to Yash, I was thinking, "I hope that child aint climbing on anything cause her mind is gone." And look what you done went and done...
But seriously, I love the interaction between the two, it was so cute. I also enjoy Miroku and Yash's friendship, its so genuine, I love it. I'm glad Yash and Kag were able to get it done b/c dude was bout to blow. I want another chapter, but I'm not really on edge b/c I know you wouldn't hurt a child.
Author's Response: My Yankees sistah! Shockingly, after so much block, this one wasn't that hard to pen. I guess that's because I have a game plan. But anywhoo, glad you enjoyed it. I love Inu & Miro, they're just fun tow rite no matter what fiction I'm doing. I like letting them play off of each other. Now, about the park...
Heh, girl, you should know better than to get that comfy -I just might surprise ya!
Date: October 16, 2007 12:11 AM
Chapter number: 7
Title: Mommy and Me.
Ah man, just when they finally get everything back together....Jaden can't get hurt, he's too cute! Good-looking people don't get hurt, that's just the laws of physics! And Kagome...I'm happy for her, but I'm wondering about Jaden now. Obviously she's ready to be a mother, but is Jaden ready to accept her as one? Hm...
Excellent chapter.
PS: Nice lemon.
PPS: And nice "mind-fuck" :p. I always thought that could only be said in a sarcastic way...
Author's Response: Drake!! Thankies, homes! :P Yesh, they're back together, but only time will tell if Jaden fully accepts her. Glad you liked the lemon. I see myself moving away from being so horribly graphic in every sex scene. A fiction like this just didn't call for it >.> especially when it's for my Chibi. I don't write her lemons as it is, so this was a real first! Mind-fuck -haha. I've only heard it the sarcastic way, too. But I figured that it ift. Thanks for reading!!
Date: October 15, 2007 11:11 PM
Chapter number: 7
Title: Mommy and Me.
I haven't even read it yet, but the title ha got me smiling. Too cute!!!
Ok gonna read it now.
Author's Response: Thanks! I kinda thought it fit. :-)
[Report This]Date: October 15, 2007 10:48 PM
Chapter number: 7
Title: Mommy and Me.
OMGWTFH!!!!!
!!!!!!!
O_____O
He's gonna get hurt!! He can't get hurt!!! :( :( :( :( nooo. ;__;
Guh. Now I'm nervous as all heck. *sighs*
So I LOVED it!!! The lemon was damn sexy, and all the mother/son interaction was sooo sweet. I'm glad things are on their way to a resolution!!! Jaden is the cutest thing alive and I love his little baby talk. ^-^ Squeee.
Loved it, Nee-chan!!!!! THANKIES!! <(^-^)> <33333
[Report This]Date: October 10, 2007 4:03 PM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: The Day the Sun Set.
Sweetie, you have just got to add on to this. out of everything that you've written (which an awful lot is truly fantastic), this just strikes a cord, ddep within me. Let's just say that Serge & I went through something like this decades ago. Not quite the same, but not all that different.
I know that you've been feeling out of it, & I'm hoping to see another chapter really soon, but I,ll understand if you can't.
Take care, Sweetie. Love you.
Viki.
Author's Response: Feudal Mammy!! I'm sorry the update for this is taking a while, but you know why. However, I did start writing again and will be updating this one shortly, so don't worry. I'll something for you when you get home. And I'm glad you can still read this even if things hit a tad close to home. I'm hearing that more and more, and it's sad, but also nice that so many can relate.
I'm praying for you, so Godspeed. <333
[Report This]Date: October 09, 2007 10:54 PM
Chapter number: 6
Title: Their Landslide.
gyah! tears, tears, and more tears. so sad. and yet, alot of hope involved as well. what a story. i am with sango, i don't know if i could do what kagome did. but, also, i understand miro's p.o.v. it couldn't get more complicated than this, but, it makes an awesome fic. i hope it's not over. i am hooked big time!
Author's Response: Court!! I know, such a teary story this is. But plenty of hope and turn around on the horizon. Sango is typical, lol. I don't have any friends that wouldn't have reacted the same way. This one is sooo different for me in so many ways. But, it's a good different. Thanks for reading!
[Report This]Date: October 09, 2007 10:35 PM
Chapter number: 6
Title: Their Landslide.
Sweetie, I AM SOOO looking forward to what you've got coming up next. despite everything, PLEASE don't wait tooo long, I beg of you.
This is very, very good. Luv Ya.
Author's Response: I'll update soon, I promise! Just give me a couple of day. ^^ Love you!!
Date: October 09, 2007 10:10 PM
Chapter number: 4
Title: Try For Me
just have to say that jaden has stolen my heart. what a sweetie!!! o.k, now back to finish the rest. ^_^ (on the end of chapter 4, btw)
Author's Response: Tee hee! Me, too! Jaden is a lot of fun -I can just picture him in my head. :P
[Report This]Date: October 09, 2007 3:20 PM
Chapter number: 3
Title: Shattered
i have to stop here for a moment cuz i gotta pick the kiddo up from school... but wow. this is not what i expected. this story is deep and painful i can't imagine such a situation. i would feel just like kagome! her pain touches me and i feel for her. inuyasha is scum, but i feel for him, too. they both have been delt a shitty hand for sure. i will get to the rest of this when i get back and after homework. T_T; really great stuff here. i luv it. i knew i would. lol
Author's Response: Take your time, court! :P There's only 6 chappies and this will be a short story. I've been toying with making it longer, but I won't because there's no need to, ya know? It has a point and will wrap up by chap 10. *nods*
Date: October 07, 2007 11:35 PM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: The Day the Sun Set.
youve probably seeen many anonymous review lately. thats probably me.. thesame person, yeah. ahha, UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE! *starts mob* UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE!. : )
Author's Response: LOL! Soon, I promise. ^^
[Report This]Date: October 03, 2007 10:47 PM
Chapter number: 6
Title: Their Landslide.
Fuck!! Fuck!! Fuck!! How the hell do you do that?? How is it you suck me into this shit?? Here I was just whisltling along a nice tune and minding my own buisness...and ya know, clicked on a link that says "Kiki's site" and I saw this pretty little pink title that said "Ever After". Sounded pretty innocent, and then BANG!! Its an angster, make your eyes bleed with tears.....I wanted to rip my eyes away. But do you know what this buiscuit did?? Oh Im sure you do!! I fucking hit the pretty pink button that said "next"! Thats what this biscuit did. You know what I think?? I dont think you reaaaaally are a makeup artist..OH no!! You work for fuckin Lifetime!! Thats right....!! Uh huh!! Oh the secret is out now!! Damnit, can someone get me a kleenex???? I extra Looooove you Kik!! Hugz and big fat biscuit kisses....muuah!!
Author's Response: BISCUIT!!!!! Thanks for reading this one, especially at a time like this. I'm happy you're enjoying it. I'm behind on chappies, but I'm working on it. I missed you tonight, but I'll try to be on tomorrow. I have so much to tell you. sigh. Love you! <33
[Report This]Date: October 02, 2007 1:05 AM
Chapter number: 6
Title: Their Landslide.
Wow. Kagome is strong. Chris never stayed with us. His mother kept him. But she got child support. Alot of it. But in more ways this story is dif. But this story seems to be getting through the worst part it seems
Well unless Kikyou desides she wants him back.. or lik years later comes back into his life and tries to start evenmore problems.
Gah! That is would be a hard thing.
well awesome story/chapter as always.
Girly you still the best in angst for me.
=D
Author's Response: Wow, I had no idea... Now I understand why you didn't want to read this the first time around. *Hugs* Thank you for giving it a shot even when it hit so close to home. I really appreciate that.
[Report This]Date: October 01, 2007 11:26 PM
Chapter number: 3
Title: Shattered
Well I ave decided to coem back and read this story. No matter how close it is to my own. But Im gointo make it to the end. ANd who knows..mayeb things will work out as good or [hopefully] better for Kagome in this one.
And mayeb you can even help me over come my problem . lol
Sicne you write oh so well.
=D
Date: September 30, 2007 8:44 PM
Chapter number: 6
Title: Their Landslide.
I really love this story. it's very original and its real. i felt every emotion. I'm glad she's finally really serious about excepting both of them.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading! Yes, this one is extremely emotional and I tried to be true to it, so thanks for recognizing that. I think it would be a cop out if I sugarcoated it.
[Report This]Date: September 28, 2007 8:29 PM
Chapter number: 6
Title: Their Landslide.
heh, you have me crying again. I really love miroku in this fic... and partly, i still stand with kagome. He actually didnt kno she couldnt carry inu child and i thought he did, but now he knows he understood didnt he?
I mean, my life has been unreal in some areas and can so understand kagome in this. It's like opening up a part of me that i locked away and i can jus feel the pain so fresh you know. I had an aunt who had a miscarraige...i grew up knowing how my dad cheated on my mom which in turn scarred me. The whole cheating thing is like breathing to me, and crying jus comes so naturally you kno *sniff* I cant stop the tears. Kagome is hurt and at the same time strong... i dont think i could of moved on with a guy like that... i jus couldnt; i mean mayb if i experienced it first hand it would be different, but am speaking from what my concious is saying.
Then, i turn to inu... and i understand him too... and it makes me wanna tell kagomes mus jus fuck it and fuck him; lolz... but he still cheated on her, and that would never chance... but he really does love her, and that kind of love is like a fairytale... i'm glad kags and inu are good now...
I gotta go wash my face now, lol. I dont think any of you're fics has made me feel such sorrows... lookie now am crying more again v.v I really admire u girl, you're like a movie star who need to sign something for me.. lol... even tho i'm crying so much now; i gotta bit my lip cuz i dont want any1 to hear me...
well ja, and again... i really, really, love you're writng grrrl; you'll always be numba one in my book...
Author's Response: Aww, Bubbles, I had no idea. *hugs* I had no idea how many people would be able to relate to this story in one way or another. It's touching, but also very sad. This is teh kind of tale that you hope no one you know has ever been a part of, but alas, I'm seeing that, that isn't true. But no more tears, okay? ^_^ And thanks for sticking with the story even though it's pure drama.
Date: September 27, 2007 7:19 PM
Chapter number: 4
Title: Try For Me
Okay I understand Kags but I've known too many friends in those shoes, when you love you forgive it's what makes life work. What happen was bad but only a real man can do what he's doing and she did send him away while he was hurting too. Women do the same thing aswell so she need to try if love was ever in her heart.
Oh yeah sis I'm 19 now my b-day past on the 19th^_^
Author's Response: HAPPY BIRTHDAY, KID SISSY!!!! I didn't even know you had a birthday coming! >.< *bigs hugs* I hope you had a great one. I'll have to make you a cute IY graphic!! Now for the fic, see, that's what I mean. Forgive, but don't forget. She had to move on from that if she wanted to save her marriage. Let's hope she can, eh? lol.
Date: September 26, 2007 5:27 PM
Chapter number: 6
Title: Their Landslide.
Your are too brilliant! I swear your stories are addictive! I really loved how honest this chapter was both Kagome and Inuyasha came really far. Kagome finally got everything in perspective and can move past her rage issues. Inuyasha realized his limits. No matter how much they love each other he can't be the only one trying to get them past this. He fucked up in one of the worst possible way but is doing his best and that takes alot of guts.
I seriously love your work, can't wait for the next one.
Sango and Miroku's kid is going to be so good at arguing just watch I'll bet a million dollars lol.
Author's Response: Thanks, Megan! Wow, I really appreciate that! This story is a labor of love, I have to say. Sometimes a chap will just drain the heck out of me, and then other times I thrive on the turmoil. But I do like the way it's shaping up. "Landslide" was probably my favorite chap thus far for all of the reasons you mentioned. They both came a very long way from where they began and it can only get better. I'm working on the next chap and I really hope I can get it up by the weekend. Thank you for reading!!