Date: September 17, 2007 9:32 PM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
Kiki!!! WOW this is a very Different fic!!! but still I Love It!!!. My poor Kagome has suffered so much and Inu too, I find Jay-Jay so cute! and i hate Kikyo still....this isn't like all the others fics, still is very interesting and I wonder how this beautiful couple is going to overcome this 'mistake' that InuYasha made... how this is going to turn out to be....
Kiki:lamento no haber podido dejarte un review antes, pero ahora te dejare muchos mas lo prometo!!
sabes? yesterday I was listenin the song 'my sister lover'-Oasis and I thought of other fic of yours...ummm ;)
well...congratulations for this awesome fic!!!
hugs and kisses!!!
Author's Response: Hermana!! How are you?! OMG, it's been so long! I hope everything is going well and you're having nothing but good things coming your way! ^_^ And you like Ever After! *hugs* Thank you!! I know it's different for me, but it was an area I really wanted to touch on, yah? And I didn't forget about KOR for a moment. I was working on the latest chappie tonight and hope to post it in a day or two. I have sooo many fics to complete >.< but I will! *huggles*
Date: September 17, 2007 10:20 AM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
This story is going so well Kiki, Great job. Kagome is handling this situation quite well. I bet it’s hard for her, though it was kind of unlike Kagome to not want to touch a child… but given the situation that happened I’m sure everyone would feel a little sad.
Around the beginning I was a little lost since in the last chapter they were at the mall and all of a sudden they’re back at home. It’s good that she had some time to think about everything. I would have liked it if there was a little more at the mall. It kind of scared me at the beginning of this chapter since InuYasha was by himself. I thought that Kagome had given up on InuYasha.
How far along is Sango with her pregnancy, since it’s been while, just curious. lol
The muffle story was soooooo cute, I loved it!
The semi intimate scene was great, and I loved how Jaden just popped into the room at that moment. It made him feel more realistic since that’s what a kid would do. Hehe.. But all and all that scene was hot! I can’t wait for more from this story. Keep up the great work!!
Author's Response: Thanks, Nat! No, no more in the mall because we don't want overkill, lol. This is a short story (under 10 chaps), so it's important to keep the plot and scenes moving. But I did explain while InuYasha was alone that Kagome had agreed to a sit down in private. Going back to the mall scene in a new chap would have stalled progress.
Inu and Kags are both OOC (like most of my stuff) and instead of going by anime Kagome, I went for a more realistic version. I don't know any woman that would warm up to a child in that situation right away. To do so, to me anyway, wouldn't have been true to the personality I gave her. But more on that with the next chap, ne? ^_^
I'm actually struggling with whether or not to do a lemon. I don't write them for Chibi >.< but I'm considering it this time. It would be fairly mild though because >.> she's Chibi, lol.
[Report This]Date: September 16, 2007 11:36 PM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
Hot damn, shes home! Now, how long do she stay? or will someone more unwanted decide to show up?
Damn Onna, ya really know how to make my ass cry, lol.
Still, great chap Onna... hugzzz...
Author's Response: Thankies, Onna!! I most definitely don't want to make anyone cry! >.> Okay, maybe sometimes, lol. rnI'm glad you like it, Maru! <33
Date: September 16, 2007 11:02 PM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
I really like this story, I like all of your stories but this one is different somehow. I'm curious to see where you take this. How Kagome and Jaden are going to develop especially. Although if I were Kagome the only sex I'd be having with Inuyasha at this point in time would be the angry kind(I mean who could resist? lol) Can't wait for the next chapter!!
Author's Response: Thanks a bunch, Megan. ^^ I appreciate that. This story is different because instead of "the chase" and what goes on as the couple tries to become more solid, they're already married and trying to hold it all together in the face of something huge. Different, definitely, but fun. Thanks for the review!
Date: September 16, 2007 9:11 PM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
Where does he get off telling her, she needs to try harder. Grant it, it wasn't the kids fault but, when your upset its hard to remember facts like that. I mean its the kid she could never give you and now its looking her in the face. Give her some F-ing time dude. I mean its to not the kids fault that the two people who had him where dumb asses but, its not her fault she's not just over him being there either. *pouts* As you can tell i had a mental fight with myself about this. Its like watching a soap oprea and watching your favortie characters do this live. Your like 'WHAT ARE YOU DOING'?! Your writing has amazed me again!
Author's Response: LOL! I totally know what you mean. InuYasha seems to have forgotten how hard this is for Kags, but she *is* trying to adjust to it all. I suppose he'd under some stress and strain though. He messed up, but all of this has taken him off guard too. I suppose we'll see how this unfolds. ^^ Thanks for the review, girl!
[Report This]Date: September 16, 2007 6:08 PM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
wow, kagome is handling that so much better than i thought...i knew jaden was gonna walk in on them though ^.^ that was so cute. oh i was thinking-i dont know if i just missed it or what, but did kagome ever think that jaden is just a baby, and he didnt ask to be born? i understand
why that wasnt that big a deal in it all...and it was more focused
on her feeling like an outsider, but i was just wondering if she
ever thought about that and i just missed it.
i get more excited about this story with each chapter.Author's Response: Sheena!! kagome has kinda acknowledged that none of it is Jaden's fault, but not fully. She still can't see past Kikyou though, so she's not over it. But at least she went back home, ne? :P And you know kids always got ruin the lovin!
[Report This]Date: September 16, 2007 5:45 PM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
Ohh boy, I hope that this is the end?? I hope that Kagome can get past saying you and start using the word 'we'. Update this story soon as well as your others stories.
Author's Response: Nope, NF, not the end by a long shot. There's about 3-4 chapters left on this one, so expect more! ^^
[Report This]Date: September 16, 2007 5:14 PM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
That made me SO happy. ^_^ SQUEE. I'm so glad that Kagome came back, and that she's trying for him. It will be ridiculously hard, but she's trying, at the very least. ^__^ Good girl! *pats* JADEN IS THE MOST AWESOME THING SINCE BROWN SUGAR. I<3him. heehee. Yay. And there was some citrus!!! Not...much. but!! it was something. lmao. Wonderfulfabulousamazing. I love it. <(^-^)> *mwuah*
Author's Response: Chibi-weebs!!! Ish happy that you like it. < ( ^_^ ) > It's all for you, after all. You even got a partial lemon. I think that's huge considering the fact that I refuse to write you one, lol. Maybe you'll get lucky this time. ^^
Date: September 16, 2007 1:24 PM
Chapter number: 1
Title: Prologue: The Day the Sun Set.
I re-read it, and yeah I still feel more sorry for Yash and Jay-Jay. It may be because I've gotten over myself a long time ago, and don't really have the ego problem, and therefore have no patience for the "Why's and How's" that Kagome has concerning what happened between her and Yash. He cheated, he's sorry, you still love each other, so move on. My business training also prevents me from dwelling on decisions. If you know you are going to stay and be a family, then do it already. What is the 10 months you would spend leering at the poor child going to do for either of you. He's a lovable child whose happiness depends on you being able to provide him with a loving home, so do it already. If you can't deal, then leave, if you want to stay then do so with a smile and give the kid a hug already. It's not his fault she's barren, and making him cry can't possibly make her feel any better. Plus it's real hard for Yash to worry about both her and Jaden. Jaden is his son forever, regardless if she stays his wife or not. As an adult who claims to want to work it out, Kagome should fall in line and make it work since Jaden is 2, and can't do so himself.
Life is about setting goals and doing what you can to reach them. If her goal is to make a family with Yash, then this is her chance to get it done, so clean out the room, get some furniture, paint, and kiss her son goodnight and let him know he's loved!
Author's Response: Girl, you're so hard on a sista! LOLOL! Kagome can't get a break with ya :P I like the way you think though -very decisive and "just do it". But unfortunately, minds like yours (amongst women anyway) are in the minority, lol. I, for one, don't know if I could go back home to that situation. I'd be so flippin' loopy over it because every time I'd try to just "get over it" I know I'd fall down. I think kags' goal is to *save her marriage* as opposed to creating a family. But she has to understand that they're one and the same. If she can do that, and open her heart to Jaden, she can have it all.
[Report This]Date: September 16, 2007 12:19 PM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
Wow, poor kagome I must say she has a lot of back bone to move back into that house and take up the role as a step mom. I feel for her, I mean it was bad enough Inuyasha cheated but he had a child... Something that Kagome wanted and held dear....
Well can't wait for the next update its good.... I love drama ^.^
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I agree, Kagome is a real trooper after everything that's happened. I honestly don't know if I'd go back.
Date: September 16, 2007 11:21 AM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
Oh yeah, I'm starting to understand Kagome's position more. Now that we know about the hellhole Yash came from, it seems she's already put up with a lot of crap from him. I imagine this was the icing on the cake.
Author's Response: Tee hee! Well, they've taken crap off of each other. InuYasha has always been a good guy, but volatile (kinda like in the anime) and she helped him change. But when she went through a mental breakdown after the miscarriages, he helped her heal. So they've done a lot for each other.
Date: September 16, 2007 11:01 AM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
Wow! A lot has happened in this chapter! Inuyasha and Kagome had the talk, Kagome moved back in, and Kagome is learning to accept Jaden. Good, good, good! I feel so badly for Kagome and can't help but think that Inuyasha is expecting a bit too much of her. I mean, Jaden is Kikyou's kid! I would personally need a lot more time. But it isn't Jaden's fault and he has no idea what's going on. Oh I don't know what to think anymore!
Happy Writing!
TLH
Author's Response: Tinnnnna! Yesh, good stuff happened in this chappie, but you're right. Yash expects a lot, or rather, is hoping for a lot too soon and he has to understand that it will take more time. But she does seem to be coming around, ne? And if you don't know which side you fall on now, then I did my job!! ^_^
Date: September 16, 2007 10:43 AM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
*Now* we're getting somewhere. They're finally trying to get back together, and Kagome is ready to accept that fact that they *do* have a kid now. Which is good, cuz Jaden's too sweet and he doesn't deserve to be caught in the middle of this. And don't tease next time, real lemon, c'mon grrrl! Ah, just kidding. Peace.
Author's Response: Let me say this now, my friend. This is sooo not a lemon fic, lol. Remember, this is for Chibi, and as my lil neechan, I feel out of whack giving her one of my lemons. >.< So if there is a sex scene, don't expect my usual raunch because I just can't do that with her, lol. But yesh, Kags is feeling part of the loop a little more but I wouldn't expect miracles. ^^
Date: September 16, 2007 10:28 AM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
I love chapter 5, Kagome need to go home as she told Sango she had to face ther fears. I love how she relized that Jaden need his space and she gave up her studio for him. Again great chapter sweetie, Love Ya Much!!
Author's Response: D-Gurl!!!! Thanks for reading and liking! I've eased off the angst a bit >.> to give everyone a break. Plus, Kagome is in a slightly different space now. But it's not completely over just yet!! <333
[Report This]Date: September 16, 2007 10:16 AM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
Oh yea, i forgot to say....
Singing Inuyasha is soo fucking hawt! *__* lolz, kk i'm not crazy if that's going through your head, lol.
So glad their baq together... forever *dances with imaginary Inuyasha* lol
Author's Response: LOLOLOLZ! I loved the singing too. I think Yash is just adorable and I loved the song. I was listening to it when I wrote that scene and it just fit too well, lol.
[Report This]Date: September 16, 2007 10:13 AM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
I almost cried... but the tears didnt drop, lol. I'm getting stronger kiki, lol... XD
I cant begin to imagine what kagome's going through... i seriously dont kno if i'd be able to do what she's doing, but love is that strong eh. I still kinda think that kagome really isnt trying hard enuff, but then i cant really blame her in her situation. But she would make a really good mother, i can almost see her playing with Jay Jay XD
Oh My God... i can go on for ages about Inuyasha. I mean, he jus seems to get more sexier by the scence! He already proven himself to be an awesome father, and husband... and even tho i didnt get a full blown lemon *whimpers* lol, he did show us a lil sumn sumn... the wild and fucking untamed sumn sumn that is, *rolf* But i can see he's kinda being torn 'tween his wife and son and i dont wanna see that... But Jay jay is just a lil boy, and kagome gotta really understand that and jus love the boy. He can be hers! i bet some ppl would jus come out and tell her that her son looks kawaii cuz remember kikyou n her has some similarites... so ya. Plus with Jay Jay as her son in heart the sex will always be there *shrugs* who can complain when inuyasha is the one sexing u... err, me... oh alright, sexing her! *pouts* it's a good fantasy for me tho, lol.
*endless hugs* u out did yourself girl, i really look up to u more(if that's even posible) lolz, Ja ^__^
Author's Response: Hell yeah!!! No more crying, you! But I can see how it feels so bittersweet. You want to see Kags and Inu work it out, but at the same time, you can't help but feel like Kagome is getting a raw deal. But we'll see how they develop, after all, she does have to spend time with Jaden eventually. *huggies* Thanks for reading, girl!
Date: September 16, 2007 9:45 AM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
:) Kagome came home! whoo hoo. I am glad that she is starting to heal from the betrayal and argument. The fact that she was willing to make the sacrifice of her art room was really sweet. I wonder if she will bring back some of her art to decorate her new son's room?
Something I thought of while I was reading this was about Kikyou. When she left Jaden I just wanted to shake her. But now as more of his personality is coming out, I am having to rethink things. First she didn't have an abortion, which is something she could have easily done. Second, she interacted with Jaden in a loving manner enough that he knew it was a positive thing and wanted more. I've seen enough kids who didn't have that kind of interaction - they could never be the sweet bubbly child that Jaden is turning out to be. Finally, she knew she couldn't take care of him and took him to someone who could. I know that in later years, Jaden will look on this as a betrayal, but he will understand in time.
The Sexus interuptus was pretty funny. I don't know a parent that hasn't had that horrifying moment when the kids walk in. <snicker>
Author's Response: Caity! Thanks for reading this one! I thought kagome giving up her space was a nice way to let her healing begin, but she's obviously not there just yet. But it's a start! And you're not far off on Kikyou. She gave him up for a reason and he's doing better than he was before and certainly living in a better place. And true, most kids would see it as abandonment -if they ever remember the parent to begin with. Sexus Interuptus is hilarious!!! I think it's a kid's ritual!
Date: September 16, 2007 9:39 AM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
Damnit!!!!!!!!! SO CLOSE! I so want them to have sex and I demand a sex scene!!! AHHHHHH, you made me into a addict. Lovely chapter, but I kind of need some help.
I'm having a really hard time understanding how Kagome can stand to be in the house with Jay-Jay. I mean, I guess I'm just really reaching out to Kagome, but I think it's really unfair how Inuyasha just expects her to run in the house for one day and then accept Jaden, too? It's just difficult for me to understand how he expects it to be just like that for Kagome and her to accept the parenting role.
Well, that was my only little smurf for the chapter, but loved it cause Jay-Jay is too cute.
-And you will have a real sex scene next time, because I will see to it 'shows fake shifting beety eyes' :)
Author's Response: Yep, so close, but yet so far!! Kagome going home was hard for her and it still is. Emotions are a funny thing. You can feel something one day and then feel completely different the next, depending on what side of the bed you woke up on. Yash can't expect miracles -he has to be satisfied with her willingness to try. Real sex scene? Perhaps, but nothing like my usual stuff. I don't write <.< lemons for Chibi. Too weird! LOL.
Date: September 16, 2007 9:17 AM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
YES, I;ve got my rope!!! (I am currently imitating Jeter's trademark fist pump) I am soooooooooooo ridiculously happy now!!! YAY!!!
I am glad Yash was able to show Kagome what love means to him and convince her that they should be together. I know it won't be easy, but if she can accept lil Jaj-Jay as her son, things can work out so beautifully.
I really enjoyed their dialouge together, because it really showed how much they love each other. I am also glad she went back to Sango's with her mind made up, because if it wasn't Sango might have been able to convince her otherwise. The relationship between Yash and Jay-Jay is already so lovely, and I can't wait to see it grow with Kagome on board. And Kagome better start being nice to him, cause if she doesn't I'm going to come through the screen and mess her up!!! Well, that's it for me, I'm going to read it again now just for kicks.
Author's Response: Yes, girl, a rope!!! (and a fist pump. Hell yeah!) I agree. I like their dialogue -it was raw and honest, which I love. I loved their meeting too. I loved how nervous they were around each other at first -I even loved how he pressed the issue of her being Jaden's mother. I love them together, but it's not all paradise just yet. Like I told someone else >.> emotions are funny things. :P Foreboding, ne?
Date: September 16, 2007 8:15 AM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
YES! I'm so glad that Kagome made the right decision. After all they'd been through, Inuyasha did at least deserve a chance to make things right. The situation with Jaden is....a little more complicated (to say the least), and, whether Inuyasha likes it or not, it going to take a little time for Kagome to adjust to him. He's thinking like a dad now, and he SHOULD, but Inuyasha needs to understand that Kagome can't "just fall in line" , as she said, after a betrayal like that. She's already coming around anyway; his telling her that she was Jaden's mother now REALLY helped. It was the truth anyway....but that made her stop feeling so left out. And the fact that she was willing to sacrifice her art space for Jaden says a lot about how much she wants to make this all work out.
And let's not forget the "cuteness" factor; Jaden's adorable. He'll get to her soon; he's just too sweet not to. The only reason he hasn't managed yet is because his presence reminds Kagome of two horrible things: Inuyasha's betrayal and the fact that SHE couldn't be the one to give her husband a child. Tough things to get over.....but I hope they won't last. Maybe this baby can help her see the positive of his presence instead of the negative. Inuyasha can't really do much more on this front. Kagome and Jaden will have to build this relationship on their own. The fact that they both love him is just the starting point.
I do have one slight disagreement, though. Would Kagome be so willing to sleep with her husband again after she found out about his affair? I know it's been two years, and she's slept with him countless times since the affair anyway, but that was in ignorance. Since it's only been a few days, I think I'd still be imagining him in bed with her. But, that's just me. If she can already put that aside, knowing that's she's had sex with him too much since then for it to matter, good for her. I'm a bit of a grudge holder, though (BIG understatement, LOL), and Kagome doesn't seem to be. PLUS, the man is sexy as hell......hmmmm. Maybe THAT'S why............LOL
Author's Response: Ms. Goddess!!!! You're so darned perceptive! *shakes fist* LOL. You're right about everything, even the sex, and that's all I'm going to say on that. <.< But back to Kagome and Yash, Jaden is really awesome, but asking Kagome to just fall in love with him is not realiztic. Yash loves him already, he has no choice. That's his son and they've spent enough time together to build a relationship. Kagome hasn't had that and it's impossible to ask her to just walk in and deal. But the fact that she gave up her studio on her own is a big deal because it proves that she wants to try. Good call all around, girl!!
Date: September 16, 2007 6:01 AM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
You're really churning this out, huh? It's such a great story, and I love how over-extreemely complicated their situation is. Jay is getting cuter and cuter, and I can't wait for Kagome to warm up to him. He really seems to want her to like him, too XD Poor thing. So cuuute ^^^^
And you just had to have him interrupt the hot sex scene. Kids just have to do that, don't they ._.
Keep it up, you are doing no wrong with this one. Update soon!
Author's Response: Can you believe it? I'm actually updating this one fast but that's because it should have been ready on 9/3. >.< I admit tho, this one is so much fun! Thanks for reading (and liking) it. And you know the kids always interrupt >.> they have fucking radars!!
Date: September 16, 2007 4:18 AM
Chapter number: 5
Title: There's no "I" in "We".
oh dearrrrrrr!!! I was about to BURST with Inu!! ajajajajajjaajaaaa but i SEE THAT COMING!!! XP excellent Kiki-neechan!!!! u r the best!!! I love it!!!
Author's Response: Maria-nee-chan!!! Thank you for being my first reviewer! <33 I'm happy you like it, and I know... the sex scene... >.> but that's what babes do, ne?? ^_^
Date: September 14, 2007 11:45 AM
Chapter number: 4
Title: Try For Me
*heart tug* God damn him doing that!! Lol, i would of pulled him into a hug the moment he said i have no pride and went into that speech. That song was great but, I also hear this song played by Elliott Yamins-Wait For You which i listened to in the back round when i was readin. Have you heard it? Ever time i read your stories I listen to music and this song was playing when i was reading this chapter. Here's a piece of it.
It's been a long time since you called me
(How could you forget about me)
You got me feeling crazy (crazy)
How can you walk away,
Everything stays the same
I just can't do it baby
What will it take to make you come back
Girl I told you what it is & it just ain't like that
Why can't you look at me, your still in love with me
Don't leave me crying.
Anyways awesome chapter and totally love how Inuyasha is begging and Normally i'm for the woman throwing him to the thrash but... Maybe she can give him a month and see if she can still be with him. I mean something she could never give him is going to be staring at her for the rest of her life. I know from watching women close to me thats not something they can really get over.
Author's Response: I've never heard that song, but it fits just as well! I think I added Lauryn Hill not just because it worked, but because I was listening to it the whole time I wrote it. I think that's how most of my music ends up in stories, lol. I adored InuYasha in that mall. His "I have no pride" speech is probably one of the most heartfelt things I've ever written. I was trying to show how desperate his love for her was and I really thing I accomplished that. Thanks for reading and reviewing. I appreciate it!!
Date: September 14, 2007 12:48 AM
Chapter number: 4
Title: Try For Me
P.S. I'm still reading. Your too good of an author not to.~Cricket42
Author's Response: Thanks a bunch! It would have sucked if you didn't at least see how it ends. ^^
[Report This]Date: September 14, 2007 12:46 AM
Chapter number: 4
Title: Try For Me
OMG!!! No other words than those.~Cricket42
Author's Response: Well, I'll take that over "This sucks" any day!! ^_^